What do you think about this as a story line? (also, help with writing and advice/tips please? )?

I have NO experience in writing, I never read or write. But I keep getting ideas so hey, why not make a short story out of it? It's really short.





2 best friends (family friends and known each other since they were little) go to Mexico for a cousin's wedding. The girl that is getting married had a thing for best friend #1, so the husband gets jealous (also because he's really drunk from partying) and sends out a gang to kill that best friend #1. Best friend #2 gets angry and upset and decides to avenge his best friend. He joins the military/army/etc. to fight for his country, but it all started because he wanted to stand up for his lost best friend. Best friend #2 is trying to wipe gangs and fight against gang members and those who do crimes and such. :/





I really have no idea how to put it any better. :P


If I should add anything to make it even more sad and adventurous, please tell me!





Also, any help with becoming a better writer? I am not the best writer, so my story will usually be pretty straight forward :P





Thank you!.





PS: Please no negative comments.What do you think about this as a story line? (also, help with writing and advice/tips please? )?
WAIT! Does Erin(i'm calling bff#2 him) know who killed Gary(bff#1)? I think it's a good storyline. Here's some advice. You need to plan a time a few times a week just to gather your thoughts about the story. (Character names, specific places, conflicts etc.) When you do all that, WRITE! Write until your story is complete. It takes discipline. You have to set deadlines and stick to them. Such as, ';I am going to finish up to Chapter 7 by July 4.'; It takes small steps to invent a great story. I am working on my own and I am more than halfway finished. If you keep yourself disciplined and keep your eye on the prize, you'll have a winner write in front of you. It's a great story and I'd love to read it.What do you think about this as a story line? (also, help with writing and advice/tips please? )?
I think it sounds pretty good!! Like, a good action/suspense story!





I try to write stories sometimes too, but they're waaaaay lame.


Yours is good!
I kinda like it.


i think maybe when u do write it make it dramadic like he has a hard time at war and gets beat up by gang but trys more and more untill he wins idk lol if u publish it ill so read it lol